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  • 5 easy ways to improve cohesion.

  • The IELTS writing task.

  • My name is Ben Worthington and you've probably heard my voice

  • at maybe some other English learning website.

  • And today, we're going to focus entirely on improving cohesion.

  • And the good thing is, it's relatively easy.

  • So let's start. Let's get straight to it.

  • So first of all, I want you to look at collocations. And especially four word collocations.

  • These are really interesting facets of the English language. Right?

  • First of all, I'll go over this pretty quickly, alright?

  • First of all, they make you sound more natural and more cohesive

  • because they just flow in you.

  • The listener (probably a native speaker) is expecting this combination

  • so they don't have to focus that much. It just flows.

  • So if you can incorporate these into your writing,

  • it's going to sound much better and most importantly

  • you're not going to make as many mistakes.

  • Because you've got a string of words which are perfect together

  • and therefore there's less chance of making a mistake.

  • Okay? So you're reducing the error, using grammatically perfect constructions.

  • This will increase your score for grammatical range and accuracy.

  • Now, if you have a pen, write these down.

  • Write these down for a number of reasons.

  • Firstly, it will help you remember them.

  • Secondly, you can use them in your essays when you start writing one.

  • (Hopefully today. Hopefully this afternoon maybe or this morning... whatever.)

  • And thirdly, it's good practice.

  • It's good practice for your listening, for associating sounds to words

  • and maybe if there's a new word there,

  • you'll understand how it's pronounced first, rather than looking at it,

  • which can be misleading sometimes.

  • So copy these down.

  • May be due to the... Okay?

  • May be due to the... Alright?

  • This may be due to the various aspects of the new technology.

  • Okay? Next one.

  • There are a number of...

  • 5-word collocation there.

  • There are a number of reasons why.

  • There are a number of different sources of pollution.

  • Next one.

  • Is one of the most...

  • Is one of the most...

  • This is really helpful, actually because not only is it superlative

  • but it's also... You can use this in the examples which we'll look at in a second.

  • For example: London is one of the most densely populated cities in the world.

  • If you're writing these down, I'd recommend you write down

  • the example sentences I give as well,

  • so you can use then into context.

  • Maybe write a few sentences of you own, using the collocations.

  • So, next one.

  • Is one of the most important...

  • Russia is one of the most important natural energy suppliers in the world.

  • Okay? Next one.

  • Play an important role in...

  • Play an important role in...

  • The United States plays an important role in administering trade contracts,

  • or enforcing trade pacts (for example).

  • The results of this study (this is another good one)...

  • The results of this study...

  • Because if you're given an example,

  • sometimes you will use studies from the IMF and then you can say,

  • "The results of this study (or these studies) show that

  • gender inequality is still a dream to be reached."

  • Or something like that.

  • Now, I'll go over the next ones a little bit faster.

  • It can be observed that...

  • This may be due to...

  • That's just another way to say "because" but you're saying "because" in 5 words.

  • This may be due to... Okay?

  • Then if you really want to go a little bit further, you can say

  • "This may be due to the fact that 9 out of 10 people in Britain love the weather."

  • Whatever. Okay?

  • The results of this study... (Like we said before.)

  • An important role in the... Okay?

  • An important role in the...

  • Europe has an important role in the agreement of trade deals, internationally. (For example)

  • In the case of...

  • In the case of Italy, conditions were changed drastically. (For example)

  • In the case of...

  • Or in the case of the third-world blah, blah, blah. Okay?

  • Now, these ones... I have a list of the 10... No, I think... Of the 20 most common four

  • word collocations

  • found in academic texts.

  • And I extracted the ones I felt most useful for an IELTS essay.

  • So these ones are very common in academic writing.

  • So another reason why you should be writing them down.

  • Now, let's have a look at some of these collocations actually in the introduction

  • to your IELTS test 2 writing.

  • So we're going to look at "is one of the most,"

  • and "due to the fact that..."

  • So we could say, "Economic development is one of the most

  • critical elements of government policy due to the fact that... blah blah blah.

  • And here, we can just change that to any topic.

  • If we have a question about education (public and private for example), we could say

  • "Public education is one of the most important challenges facing the western world today."

  • Next sentence.

  • "This may be due to the fact that..." blah blah blah.

  • And if we are going to use this in our introductory sentence to the essay...

  • Which I think is a good idea because in that first sentence,

  • 50% of the words you used are going to be perfect. Absolutely perfect.

  • Which is a very good way of starting your essay.

  • Now, if you are going to use it, be careful because you have to adapt it.

  • Singular-plural agreement.

  • So if you are talking about health issues as your topic,

  • if that's the question you're given, you would say

  • "Health issues are some of the most important matters facing the west

  • due to the fact that...� Okay?

  • So we adapt it.

  • Now, if you've got a question about pollution or congestion in the city or city congestion,

  • you would say

  • "Environmental issues are some of the most common challenges facing developing countries

  • in Europe nowadays."

  • Just change that and say

  • "Environmental issues are some of the most common challenges facing developing countries

  • in Africa nowadays.

  • It can be observed that..." Another collocation for your second sentence.

  • "It could be observed that these problems largely stemmed from mismanagement, government

  • corruption, or whatever."

  • So, good work.

  • And now, perhaps the most useful use of the collocation

  • is not only in setting off our Task 2 essay to a perfect start.

  • But we can also use them very effectively in the examples.

  • Now, examples are required for practically all of the Task 2 questions.

  • So it makes sense to master this skill.

  • Because it's going to be necessary and you can use it for 2 of your body paragraphs.

  • So if you can get this skill under control and how to give a good example then you're

  • going to get more points in the bag.

  • You're going to guarantee yourself more points.

  • And the good thing is that giving an example is largely...

  • It's pretty much the same way you give... Let me rephrase that.

  • Giving an example, you're going to give it the same style or similar structure for every

  • essay you write

  • especially an IELTS essay.

  • So you can learn a set structure and then just adapt it to any topic.

  • I'll show you how.

  • So we can say, "For example, it should be noted that recent studies by the IMF show

  • that London

  • is one of the most important financial centres in the world.

  • This may be due to the..."

  • Okay? So the collocations I used there are:

  • For example,

  • it should be noted that

  • (then I say) recent studies by the IMF

  • by the WWF Wildlife Fund

  • by the OECD

  • (Whatever)

  • show that London

  • Paris

  • Marrakech

  • (Whatever)

  • is one of the most important cultural centers in the western world.

  • (or whatever)

  • So that structure you can use. And once again, 50% of the words used in that example

  • are the collocations, and they're perfect. Grammatically perfect.

  • So you just guaranteed yourself a good quantity of points by using that said structure.

  • Let's have another look.

  • Just a word of warning:

  • Avoid using the same collocations that you use in your introduction that you use in your

  • example.

  • Change them.

  • So if you've used "There are a number of" or "The most important" or whatever,

  • don't use it in your example.

  • Because the examiner can't give you points in that. You have to show range.

  • So, let's go to the next example.

  • "For instance, there are a number of"

  • "For instance, there are a number of studies by various governmental bodies

  • that show that

  • (In fact, that's quite universal. You could use that in practically any essay."

  • "For instance, there are a number of studies by various Governmental bodies

  • that show that equality in the work place...

  • that show that a clean-air policy...

  • that show that (you could put anything in there)

  • plays an important part in the society...

  • in the global economy...

  • in the socio-demographic makeup of the country..."

  • (whatever)

  • Then once again

  • "This may be due to the fact that..."

  • So if you're writing these down, I want you do be using them in the next essays you write.

  • Now, another way you can improve the cohesion and coherent

  • is repetition.

  • And you can do this by repeating key nouns in your paragraph.

  • So if you are writing an essay about currency-stability, you can use a "currency-stability" quite a

  • few times.

  • And that's okay. If you're going for a lower grade, that's okay.

  • However, if you're going for a higher grade (band 7) then what you want to do is

  • use the same policy by repeating it,

  • but use synonyms.

  • Ensure the examiner that you've got a very wide vocabulary.

  • So if I was writing about evolution, I would say:

  • These fumes,

  • The smog,

  • Air contamination,

  • This serious issue...

  • (For example, if I've ran out of synonyms I would say, "This serious issue needs to

  • be dealt with by the government." And then I could say, "It needs to be dealt with severely

  • using regulations from the state.")

  • (So we've got "fumes," "smog," "air contamination," then if we're running out we could say "This

  • serious issue...")

  • Now then...

  • Transition signals.

  • Transition signals is just a fancy word for:

  • "First... Second... Next... Finally..."

  • Like the light traffic signs; it�s just indicating where you have to go, giving directions

  • to the reader.

  • And if the reader's got directions then it's going to be much easier to follow the actual

  • writing.

  • So during your essay you can say "First..." "Second..." "Next..." "Finally..."

  • To introduce a conclusion you can say:

  • "Clearly..."

  • "In summary..."

  • "In conclusion..."

  • And then to introduce a result you can say:

  • "Accordingly..."

  • "As a result of..."

  • "As a consequence of..."

  • A few different ones there, I'm sure you've heard them before.

  • And these ones usually go at the beginning of the sentence.

  • The 4th point is using consistent pronouns.

  • This means that you avoid changing from singular to plural.

  • Let me give you an example. One example might be:

  • "You can see how students have changed over the last decades,

  • in the 60s a student was often seen as struggling in economic hardship."

  • If I was editing this, if I was correcting it, I would write:

  • "It can be seen how students have changed over the last decade,

  • in the 60s they were often seen as struggling in economic hardship."

  • First of all, I changed it from second person to the passive.

  • I used the passive structure saying "It can be seen" because you can see it is quite conversational.

  • The next change I did was I kept it in the plural just like in the original.

  • 'Cause it said in the original "You can see how students have changed over the last decade."

  • I kept that the same and then I changed the second one which is in the singular.

  • In the first version, it says "... in the 60s a student was often..."

  • And then I changed it: "... in the 60s they were often seen as struggling in economic

  • hardship."

  • I did this just to keep it consistent and it's easier to follow.

  • If it's easier to follow, I'm improving the cohesion.

  • Now this rule, you may need to bend it a little bit just to show the examiner that you've

  • got a wide range of vocabulary.

  • But perhaps the most important thing here is just avoiding the "You can see..."

  • and giving it a more academic tone.

  • Now then, final suggestion to keep your essays very coherent and cohesive

  • is just to stick with one idea in each paragraph.

  • Because at the end of the day you've gonna get points for your English,

  • not for the quality of your ideas.

  • So you just put one idea that's valid and it makes it easier to follow.

  • And just as a side note (this isn't in the note but I just remembered),

  • one idea and even just one view point.

  • Because if you've got one viewpoint, you're not jumping from side-to-side, from different

  • angles,

  • trying to demonstrate the argument in different ways.

  • If you're a very good writer then it could be an option to do this.

  • But in general, I tell all my students (all my online students) that just go for one point

  • of view.

  • It's easier to write,

  • it's easier to follow,

  • and you're going to pick up points for your cohesion and coherence.

  • And this is especially important because in the IELTS Task 2

  • you've got 250 words.

  • So it's not much at all.

  • So if you do want any more help from me

  • just go to the website.

  • You can sign up to the mailing list.

  • I'm sending out advice, sample essays, tips to improve the clarity...

  • I'm sending out lots of things every week to help students.

  • I'm quite happy because Julia, she got 7.5.

  • She's off to Cambridge. It probably helped the interview.

  • Vitali, he got in contact. He took his exam twice.

  • First, he got a 7.5. He wasn't happy so he went back in March and got an 8.

  • Think like that. Before he was using the sentence guide, he just got a 6 and a 6.5.

  • So well done, Vitali. Excellent there.

  • And yes, if you also want to improve your grade and if you're fed up, frustrated,

  • just send me an email.

  • I'll always reply.

  • At the most is a day later but yeah, just get in contact and we can do it.

  • Really.

  • I've got lots of success now.

  • I'm quite happy about it.

  • So please just send me an email.

  • And also, well done, Cornelia. She got a 7.5. She's off to New Zealand.

  • She might have read the review on the website.

  • So it's not impossible.

  • You just need to get your head down,

  • get some work done,

  • get in contact if you're having any problems,

  • find help.

  • You're not in this alone. There's lots of students doing it and lots of teachers willing

  • to help as well.

  • So just keep going.

  • Alright, thanks for listening.

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