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high in this video, we're going to write a task to response to a question that was seen on last week's exam on 7 January 2017.

So the question that was seen is some people feel raising the age limit required for obtaining a driver's license can enhance road safety with this.

Be an effective strategy in your country.

Okay, so there are a number of ways that we could respond to this essay question.

We could create a discussion out of this and sort of look at both sides and come to some sort of reason.

My advice is always to do what is easiest, because, of course, we want to work any angle we can in the examination room to enhance our mark.

So given this question, I would suggest the candidate right, a very straightforward argument essay.

So just kind of choose a position and then come up with some supporting points and and support that position on dhe.

Then, even if we if we look at the problem itself, um, I think it would be very easy to create arguments that support this.

For example, in Canada, the age limit is 16 and you actually don't get your full driver's license until you're about 18 years old.

But for the for the purpose of simplifying everything in my asset, I probably wouldn't get into explaining all of that.

I just make 16 the age limit and then talk about reasons why giving a person a driver's license when they're 16 years old, um, would increase road safety issues.

So of course we could talk about things like maturity.

We could talk about things like emotional development, particularly among young men, which is something that I kind of brainstorm what I was thinking about this question.

So I think that in supporting this position, it actually leads us to a lot of really, you know, easy points that we can come up with.

And, um, and that makes the entire, you know, essay writing process a lot more straightforward.

Okay, so I'm going to write a, um, an argument essay that supports this position and just the way that it's worded because, you know, it says, would this be an effective strategy in your country?

There is going to be some personal language.

I'm gonna make reference to my country in the essay.

I'm going to talk about Canada in particular and Canadian law when it comes to issuing driver's licenses.

And so, of course, if you were writing this essay, you have to focus on your own country and its loss.

Okay, so the two points that I'm going to use to support, um, this position, um, are the maturity level of a person when they're 16 years old and the motivators that would push a person to get a driver's license.

So my argument is basically that at 16 you're probably motivated to get a license because, you know, you want more independence, you want to hang out with your friends and these sorts of things.

And so the argument is, is that this is probably going to lead to road safety issues in a way that is not apparent when somebody is 20 year older.

Or at least, you know, the um, the degree to which this would cause road safety issues is less when you're when you're older than 16.

Okay, so the first thing, of course, is we need to create a an introduction paragraph that outlines what we're going to talk about in the rest of the essay.

So I'm gonna bring up these two points as well.

I'm gonna make clear to the Examiner what the age limit is in Canada, and I'm going to continue to reference that throughout the rest of the essay.

So of course, we want some sort of background sentence on the topic, so I might start with something like the age at which a person is legally able to drive is a very important consideration.

Okay, so we're not getting any specifics yet, but we're just pointing out that we do recognize this is obviously something that has to be taken very seriously in my home country, Canada.

Um, I can drive independently at the age of 16.

And so again, I'm keeping this kind of simple.

Like I was saying, it would take you to the age of 18 before you can actually drive completely independently.

But, uh, just Okay, so I think I also want to point out in the sentence that I feel that this is too young, so I could throw in a comma and write something like an age that I feel is too young.

Okay, so in that one sentence I'm sharing, you know what the age level is in Canada and whether you know what my position is on that whether I thinkit's too young or not.

Now I want to connect this to what the wth e question says.

So some people feel raising the age limit is required for obtaining a driver's license.

Ah, so some people feel raising the age limit require for obtaining a driver's license can enhance road safety.

So I'm gonna connect this back to that question, say, whether I agree with it or not.

So, um, I would say something like, I ve s agree that raising the driving age limit in my country, uh, would enhance, um, road safety.

And I'm even borrowing a word or two from the question.

A little bit of picking like that is is okay.

I mean, of course, you don't want to copy the question it word for word, but, you know, it's it's very clear to the Examiner that this part of the introduction directly responds to the question.

Okay, so there's no there's no real question.

The examiners mind what my position is with regards to the task to description that we've received.

So now that I've extended my position, as you know, of course, I want to just give up a very brief preview to the points I'm going to use to support this position.

So to prove this, I will Look, that's, uh, drivers.

Um, maturity, um, and the motivators, uh, behind their decision, Dr.

And so, of course, all of this is you know, you been up to your your position on the topic of these are things that you want to decide before you actually put your pen to paper and start writing the TSA.

Because you want to demonstrate to the examiner that you have.

I mean, even though your time is limited that you have put some thought into how you're going to reveal your position and structure the essay, okay?

And it helps with cohesion, of course, because in setting it up like this, it's connecting to what you're gonna talk about in the rest of the essay.

So it creates a lot of nice linking between the different parts Okay, so that's the introduction, you know, very straightforward.

Let's go to our first supporting paragraph.

Of course, we're gonna look at the topic of maturity.

So, uh, firstly, um, the experimental Nick, True of the biggest since the adolescent, um, growth stage mates.

Okay, Um okay, so s so now we're gonna connect this with an example.

I'm going to just kind of pull examples out of the air ops.

They don't have scientific evidence in front of me.

You know, linking adolescent maturity levels.

So and you won't either when you're in the examination room, so it's it's, you know, it's important to note that you can make up your own examples as long as they are believable, and they're not too far fetched as long as you're you're showing that you're capable of using language to show how one tangible item proves a position.

You know, it's it's all right, the examiners not gonna not gonna check up whether your examples are truthful or not.

I mean, unless you say something that's completely outlandish, but so let's come up with an example here.

No, I want to talk about adolescent males because that's that's the easy point to make here.

So adolescent, um, men, for example, um, are scientifically, um, reported boarded to have heightened levels of aggression and, um, competitiveness.

And then we can play with the idea that these air traits that's the latest.

Um, you know, as you get older, they were trying to connect it to the idea that, you know, as people get older, they're more capable of driving without causing accidents, so that statistically diminish by the time, Um, by the time they are 20 years old.

Adolescent men, for example, are scientifically reported to have heightened levels of aggression and competitiveness traits that statistically diminished by the time you're 20 years old.

Okay, so what we're saying is aggression and competitiveness.

These things are more prevalent when you're 16 years old and less prevalent when you're 20 years old.

So the obvious conclusion that we're trying to draw from this is that you know, 16 is too young to be issuing a driver's license to somebody.

Okay, so, uh, we want to kind of create a logical lead towards that conclusion.

These, um, these I can't get to maturity and some of these more immature emotions.

But writer's block here, because Because we can't say competitiveness is an immature emotion.

Let's see, eso this ruling people prone to prone to these emotions can clearly have real ramifications, Uh, on the overall sea of right in Canada.

People proud of these emotions completely have real ramifications.

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